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28 September 2003 @ 11:41 pm
ha ha!  
I pretended like my thingamabob was an actual story and posted it. Now I can soothe myself with buttery ego balm and tell myself that my weekend was just as productive as I wanted it to be even though I didn't do what I intended. (Also? I did no laundry and will be wearing a bathrobe, boa, and waders to the office tomorrow.)

http://www.drizzle.com/~eliade/xs_frivol_again.html
 
 
 
Erin: Slashy?  Us?tingler on September 29th, 2003 02:26 am (UTC)
Madam, I am undone!

This was...perfabulous!

I'd like to quote a favorite line, but where to start?

This one?
His personal vampire was clenched in a slayer fist and wore an expression as if he'd just misplaced a thought somewhere over in Xander's pants.

This one?
Willow's jaw had come unhinged, leaving a one-inch gap between her parted lips, and Buffy had taken on a theatrically stunned expression, the one she wore when she'd just stuck her hand in human remains and needed to make the bad touch go away. (I can *see* that look!)

But really, this one--
"God, you can kiss," Spike said, still staring at Xander with a frown of surprise.

And that's just Monday!

It was like I was watching an ep, a really extra-specially good, porned-up ep. I could *hear* the voices, I could *see* the action--and man, what action!!

Thank you. I adore you. Je t'aime, je vous désire. Vos mots brillants brisent mon coeur et puis le réparent encore. Je souris par les larmes parce que je sais que vous le ferez encore.

'Course, that could just be the Lortabs talking. *g* No, seriously, I adore you! I adore this story.

Merci, merci!

The Larch: suck it (by lovebytez)the_larch on September 29th, 2003 02:51 am (UTC)
You inspired me to give in to the evilness that is this meme. Just wanted you to know.
SilverJaimesilverjaime on September 29th, 2003 03:26 am (UTC)
Gaaaahh
God - please please write more Spander !!
That was just .....yummm.
Loved it ! Thank you.
kittygoslingp on September 29th, 2003 04:28 am (UTC)
That was so funny and the way you sketched it out and the progression so plausible too I just loved it.

Spike protecting Xander from an eight foot tall capellini gut sucking monster, Xander protecting Spike from the beetles and not leaving him behind for the bad squirrels, ooh and the lines, some of the fabulous lines ...

"He made a ragged sound and forced Spike's mouth open, finding an angle that made so much sense he finally got it, he got geometry."

"he was certain he'd find Spike rolled up like a fruit-bat in his bedsheets,"

"he was being folded into Spike's arms and kissed and he forgot what he was going to say, as he'd hoped to. He was being held,"

How can you be so funny and so romantic at the same time, is there a formula?
kassrachel on September 29th, 2003 04:28 am (UTC)
will be wearing a bathrobe, boa, and waders to the office tomorrow

Should be a lovely look on you. :-)
Estepheia: Ladykillerestepheia on September 29th, 2003 05:12 am (UTC)
Um, will you marry me?
Would you like my firstborn? Or the secondborn, for that matter? *sigh*

What I like about your writing:

Imagery that feels fresh but unforced (and not too purple or far-fetched); perfect voices for the support cast; brilliant and economic description of body language; the (indulgent, but awfully pretty) Spike snapshots (Spike in a shirt, spike in a suit etc) which make me wish you could make James pose for such pics; Lovely voices for Spike and Xander; the refusal to go for superficial sentimentality and then sneaking in the schmoop via the back door, in a small dose that's more effective than the family sized variant and which leaves the reader with an inane smile on his/her face; but mostly? the fact that you manage to spike the whole thing with humor. It's darn difficult to be funny without resorting to silliness. This one had perfect comic timing.

The whole story flows perfectly. So, you finally managed to core dump whole stories on paper in one big bang of creation?
Yay you.
If you could bottle that I'd be forever in your dept.

Sheesh, I'm really sycophantic today. *feels forehead* Nope, no fever. *shrug.*
Anyway thanks for a great story!
kassrachel on September 29th, 2003 05:28 am (UTC)
Oh! And this is totally, fantastically lovely. I throw flowers in your direction. :-)
Herself_nyc: robintcj's S/X manipherself_nyc on September 29th, 2003 08:11 am (UTC)
Utterly utterly perfect and funny and hot and full of that kind of poignant emotion you do so well that's never overdone. And I loved the ending. And I want you to write what happens next.

Gah!
flaming june_flaming_june_ on September 29th, 2003 08:27 am (UTC)
Oh my God, woman. You're a goddamn genius. I love this beyond belief. Also? You make me laugh. Thank you!

::prostrates before you::
JaneDavittjanedavitt on September 29th, 2003 08:58 am (UTC)
You wrote more of it! ::hearts you:: Lovely and funny and silly and hot and sad bits too.
Take This Waltzallegraconbrio on September 29th, 2003 11:23 am (UTC)
First time reader of yours here, and wow! I loved it. And you mentioned Lloyd Dobbler! whee!

wonderful characterization and humor. Looking forward to reading more.
GinnyLSginnylovesspike on September 29th, 2003 02:20 pm (UTC)
Hee! Oh, man, I knew better than to read this at work. Snickering, giggling, and just about laughing my ass off is so not professional office behavior.

You are a genius. That is all there is to it. Every line either had me in stitches or fanning myself to cool down. I could cut and paste my favorite lines but I'd just wind up pasting the whole thing. I absolutely adore your Spander. Please, never stop writing it. :-)
Lumenara Dhahm: geeklumenara on September 29th, 2003 06:59 pm (UTC)
For some reason, lj wouldn't let me comment after the earlier post, so.

"God, you can kiss," Spike said, still staring at Xander with a frown of surprise.

I love you. All that buildup of Spike's ability to have him stunned by Xander's...

giving Xander a smile that clearly said, "I know you claim you're not gay but I support your gayness anyway because I'm your friend, Xander," then ran after Buffy.

"It's innuendo, precious." He rolled the words off his tongue like honey. "You know what it means."

And then the whole bit with the beetles:

"No," he said, gazing into that pale, worried face. "Nothing up there but the snakes." *Man*, he thought as Spike's eyes went wide in horror. *I am such a bastard*.

and an armful of lurching, loopy death

But it was at this point that I realized I'd just have to cut and paste the whole story over, so I stopped pulling lines.

Dead-on Riley, which always cracks me up; perfect Oz, which was beautiful and also makes me laugh; the way the scene at the Bronze(?) went from funny to sexy to sitting-here-without-realizing-my-mouth-is-open tense: I wanna write like you when I grow up.
(Anonymous) on September 30th, 2003 07:34 am (UTC)
I had the same problem. Too much funny, I couldn't pick just one line.

Choice bits;

"I hate my life. So. Much."
"I hate your life too,"

"Oh oh?" Panic gripped Xander's capellini.

"Don't leave me for the squirrels, Xander."

"If anyone says the word 'beetles' to me one more time, I will lie down on this floor and cry like a little bitch."

"Any opinion I have on that goes with me to my grave--where I hope to remain dead."

"Spike's not gay," Buffy said, filling him in. "He's just a big ho."

The voices are so good. It sounds like the sort of stuff that they would say. Even Oz sounded right, and it is hard to get his voice.

The imagery was also great. You've got Xander's voice dead-on, IMO. The bit about Sharon Stones cleavage and talking to his dick in the shower were just typical 'guy' thoughts, the sort I don't often see in fanfic. Very cool.
saussy7spoons on October 1st, 2003 10:59 am (UTC)
I have no idea how to express my love for A Week of Wrong. I just feel incredibly, dementedly gay for it, and for you. I laughed and grinned like an idiot the whole way through. And then this.

But then he was being folded into Spike's arms and kissed and he forgot what he was going to say, as he'd hoped to. He was being held, then Spike was leaning back and he was being pulled down, and there was full-body contact, skin, and fingers holding his jaw at a certain angle. They kissed until Xander's hips began rubbing and refused to stop, and then Spike reversed them, tipping Xander down onto his back across the couch and resting himself with just the right amount of pressure along the length of Xander's body--amazing smooth torso, the weight of legs in jeans, muscles of his back as thick and heavy as a tiger's, and Xander's brain shorted out as he arched and when arching couldn't budge Spike off he arched some more, grinding up against heaven as if trying to struggle out of a blanket of earth.

Sexiest. Kiss. Ever. Until this one.

Spike whirled and shoved back into Xander's face and kissed him, angry, angry, angry, cradling Xander's face gently between his hands.

I didn't melt. I vaporized. You totally knock me out.
Anna S.eliade on October 5th, 2003 12:20 pm (UTC)
((You totally knock me out.))

Your feedback knocks me out--I'm glad you liked! :>D